Wednesday, April 4, 2012

Transitioning blues















 





I believed in you and who you said you were

I believed in you and who you said you were
but you weren't who you said you were

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
You said you were a man who liked to 'dress.

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
And I lovingly accepted you as you said you were

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
Then you told me the ugly unwelcome truth

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
Now everything must change to match your sense of self

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
And your changing has nearly made me lose my self

I believed in you and who you said you were
I believed in you and who you said you were
It's time I believed in me and who I know I am.

(Written for NaPo Day Four, "Write a blues poem", 4/4/12)
(Also posted to Hyde Park Poetry Rally, Week 65, 4/4/12)
(And to Poetry Picnic #29, "Art, Music & Poetry", 4/6/12)

5 comments:

  1. Good for you, believe in your self because am sure your beautiful and awesome. Besides you have to be most create people are.

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  2. Powerful repetition throughout ... and value validating of truth in the end. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing.

    My entry "Lost - Can you see me?"

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  3. I do like the repetition and then the final line of each stanza to advance the song - it makes it very realistic - you feel like you're stuck in the same-old, same-old, even as you advance forward toward an inevitable conclusion. Well done! Here's my contribution for the week:
    http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/04/04/drafting-in-memoriam-adrienne-rich/

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  4. And those of us who know you also believe in you!!! Great poem!!! *big hugs*

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