Sunday, September 11, 2011

Revenant of love



















So this is who you really are
and always were, you insist.
You also demand acceptance
and affection as
this, your true self.
All I see is the
body of the person
I loved, animated by
something or someone
so repulsive and unreal
that I can barely gaze upon you
without revulsion.
Go climb back in the
grave of our relationship and
haunt me no more.
(Written for MagPie Tales, Mag82, 9/11/11) and
also posted for Poetry Pantry #66, 9/11/11)

19 comments:

  1. I really, really like this. You and I were standing side by side, looking at this creepy-freaky thang.

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  2. Ooof. "The grave of our relationship" - great punch to that!

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  3. I agree with Irish Gumbo. "The grave of our relationship" is super.
    Good work!
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  4. Wow, that packed a punch. Terrific take.

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  5. wow! love the last three lines..

    nice take!

    JJRod'z

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  6. A really great reaction to the prompt

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  7. Clever use of the prompt to lay a ghost...

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  8. Well said with such conviction. Powerful!

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  9. words that sting! I think the ghost should get your message loud and clear. Great response to the prompt

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  10. Yes I would want to send him away just like that! thanks.

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  11. dang...spot on the body of one i once loved animated by something else...wonder how many feel this way...

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  12. This is just so 'wow'! Well written and really gets to the haunt stopping! Nicely done.

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  13. Go climb back in the
    grave of our relationship

    That's one partnership that's dead an buried!

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  14. Sometimes we must confront our ghosts...

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  15. Clever take on the prompt. Ghosts of our past often rise up to burden our souls... yet to bury them we must let them go completely.

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  16. Hohoho,

    What charming poetry you have posted here.

    Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,

    Cheers.
    Hope to see you in.

    Happy Writing..
    xoxox

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