Sunday, August 21, 2011

Hope for Adam and Eve











Years of helpless disagreement
fury and soft voices equally
deployed, threats and promises
counseling and writing and pleas
and sponsors and silence
as what was deliberately concealed
became known.
Intimacy vanished where
once soul mates held
each other tight, gazes resting
in trust and love.
Those eyes now tired, jaded,
disbelieving.
Emotionally and spiritually
and physically
separated.
Beginning again
to be reacquainted after the
bitterness and disappointment
of unreasonable expectations and
slithering dishonesty.
Standing outside the gates of
a once very personal Eden
unable to go back, we
consider building a life
together anew, with eyes clear and the
knowledge of each other's
good and evil
clearly to mind.
There will be birthing pains
but always hope and faith.
(Posted for Gooseberry Garden, Week 1: "Adam and Eve", 8/21/11)

9 comments:

  1. nice ending...it is never easy but if we hold each other along the journey, it can work!!!
    Here's my offering: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/vanished/

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  2. This is wonderful. I love what you've done with the story. So well told, too.

    Here is my offering for this first Gooseberry Garden picnic: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/this-eden/

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  3. nice Piece... Second chances on relationships. I don't think I could ever do that but applaud those that can make it work. Love the Eden line.

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  4. Very nice modern turn on innocence lost, and rebuilding a relationship.
    I like
    "...with eyes clear and the
    knowledge of each other's
    good and evil
    clearly to mind."
    No one is perfect, it's in the knowledge and acceptance of the other's faults that a relationship truly can work.

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  5. this is great.
    reflective and smart.

    :)

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  6. Great and interesting take on the prompt. I applaud its emotional honesty.

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  7. "slithering dishonesty." Great line. I love the optimism, the reality, in this write. : )

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  8. very real ...all relationships hit a wall its how we deal with it that matters ....great poem thank you

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